Help me, please

Alright. I need help - beyond the obvious. I have the first draft of a script due in mid-March for my playwriting class, and when I proposed my idea in class yesterday, no one seemed terribly enthusiastic and the professor called it a "mixed metaphor" idea, but he would let me continue with it, since he usually likes my writing style although he doesn't get what I'm writing about. Now, all of you watch television and movies, and perhaps a play here or there, so you're not novices to reading dialogue. So, before next Monday, I want people to read the first scene (10 pages) of my script and to comment on it. Does it make sense? Can you tell the relationships between the characters? Does most of the dialogue seem necessary? Although this must sound like Spam or an advertisement, I don't know if I can post up all 10 pages on here, so if you'd like to read my script and offer me some feedback, just reply to this thread and I'll e-mail you a copy. If your e-mail address isn't in your profile, just either e-mail me (at imy0urzer0@aol.com) or just put your e-mail address in the thread. Thanks a lot. If this goes well, you're all saving me from the aggrivation of coming up with a new topic for my play.